All Comments on 'Identities Ch. 01'

Great start! Well written and draws the reader right in. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Can't wait for more.

Great beginning! Suspenseful! Intriguing! Is she the right girl? More, please, soon.

Great beginning keep going

Great first submission...I got caught up in the story right away. I can't wait to read more.

I can't wait to read more of this story!

...but you need to watch your pacing. It's all a bit too fast and slick.

This happened, then this happened, then this happened. Bang, bang, bang - there's no respite anywhere.

Get that all figured out and you could be on a real winner with this.

Thanks for the favourites and comments! Ch. 02 has finally been submitted to Literotica and so I'm hoping it will be published soon.

Too much resembling actual assault and abuse to be an arousing story of dominance to me. A Dom turns me on, a criminal/bully turns me off. I prefer my non-con more "fantasy" based with elements of seduction and humour, like "slave to the servants" or "the mountain". But I realise that's all a matter of personal preference and to each their own. So, best of luck: to infinity and beyond, I'll just hop off the ride.

Enough for next chapter.