All Comments on 'If I Fell'

Another awesome story from one of the best authors on this

loving wifes section.You nailed this story with a strong

wife that does not turn into a bimbo/slut when confronted

when another man chases after her.

Great story, the kind of wife everyone wishes they have,thanks

A woman/wife who recognizes that there are many ways to serve others and that even those ways that the world deems small are huge to the people being served. Her man did this out of love and not as a means to a self-centered end. A story of a real man and woman I'd be proud to know IRL. Dad wasn't the only one with tears in his eyes. <P> A great story and thanks for writing. As you know, I enjoy your work immensely. Phil

Fall over in exhaustion from too // thats 2 // two straight days of scribing for glory, beattles and us?<P>

Stay tuned folks for if it becomes 3, emergency teams worldwide are on alert as those lessor in respect and reality may rush like lemmings over the cliffs of Mt. Pennnandpencil to their relief and ours.<P>

What greater sacrifice could they and he make to mankind??? The reality is credibility plus long-term respect for those things of value is held closely by most but not enough by some. He says what we want to but can't in such a conversational and entertaining manner. While not everyman, it is kinda nice when you know the bottom won't fall out when it shouldn't.<P>

So thanks HDK. Waiting a day or so may save some lemming cleanup and I guess we can wait that long - but not 30 days or more 4 pennie lain or such.<P>

With Very High Regard

This was a beautifully composed tale - a tale of fidelity and love and beautifully told. I wish I knew what HDK's secret is. Wait, it just came to me - it's called talent.

that caused my heart to start pounding and my chest to tighten up or the would she or wouldn't she suspense in this story. I suspect that it was mostly the story that caused my discomfort. Once again HDK creates the tension and then gives us a happy ending. Another masterpiece from HDK.

This short story is really as good as they come. Harddaysnight is a class act. RAG

*snif* I want one just like that... The combination of humor and sentimentality makes this story a winner. We always get to know HDK's characters. We know their quirks and foibles, their relationships and interactions - and that he can do it so well in such short length is just short of a miracle and a mere hint of his talent. Thanks for a great read!

The wiufe's display and counter throw and reason and moral clarity used on Jason is akin to a JUDO Black Belt 7th degree body throw. I suspected with this story being 2 pages that this might be where HDK was headed but it was very well done

HDK

This was truly a Loving Wives story. One of the best I've ever read. The confrontation between the wife and the ex speaks for itself. I really liked the relationship the husband and wife had. He could express his fears and concerns and not be looked upon by her as a wimp. Although I thought he whined a bit I liked the raport he had with his wife. 5 stars and a thumbs up on this one.

Read ya later

Bishop

What a story! It's stories like this one that make us come back for more. This is the ideal wife and mother. The perfect family. Very believable plot and characters. You are the best HDK!

Well written and interesting story. Kudos, HDK!

No sex, but I get so tired of reading about sluts. About cheaters. So now that I've had me wholesom for the day...i'll go look for lust...Thanks...well written...Quutoo

A real loving wives story. Thank you for this.

Very well written. Thanks, HDK.

very romantic. reminds me of SelenaKitten's 'Appreciating your husband' or something like that.

nicely done. Kudos!

What a refreshing change from all those slut wife stories. Finally a wife who has more moral values than the town hooker. Well done. Can't wait for your next story.

One of your best ever. I will say that it should have been in Romance instead, no cheating just love and respect. I really like how you used Jasons oath and ethics against him, he really is much less that "the image". Thanks for another great one!

Thank you.

I haven't heard such a good argument for fidelity ever. Marriage is more about being there to take care of each other.

It may well be my favorite. Nice change from the theme of disrespect and infidelity with a little suspense to keep us wondering.

Really very good on what time does to a love, it makes a real love stronger and stronger.<p>Thank you for a great read!<p>PT

Humor, fidelity, romance, all wrapped up in a story about moral integrity. It doesn't get any better than this.

Great story! Very refreshing!

Thanks for your celebratory story about fidelity and integrity.

The level of detail about the characters and the commentary that heroes can be the common man (or woman) rang true in your story.

Great work!

As a fan of yours, I think that some of your stories are good and some are wonderful. I would describe this as one of the wonderful ones, maybe your best yet.

60 year old George

I like your other stories, but this one is really great!

Keep up the good writing!!

fidelity is all about. Dialog is great as always - you have an ear for the spoken word.

If I were a conspiracy theorist - which I'm not - I'd think maybe Jeff's wife had told her about the diamond earrings and that the necklace would have to wait. So then she knows he is in the restroom and plays it for all it's worth.

Geez, women aren't THAT devious ... are they?

Great story - regards, Jack

Nice to see a couple with their ducks in a row and know whats important. <p><p>

My only regret is that you didnt bust the arrogant 'hero' down a few more pegs. <p><p>

Thanks for writing another great story.

on a another well written and successful story. my hats off to you and i remain, a fan always.

on this site i find more cheating stories than any other type its great to read another side thanks

As good as your collective body of work may be, this was the best. No other words are necessary.

HI,

This is the first story of yours that I have read. I thought it was great. I have to admit I was hesitant to read the second page. I really didn't want her to cheat on him.

Jenny

one of the very best stories!thank you.there were tears in my eyes when it was finished.

Hard to find as good a story as this one is. A quality piece of work to say the least. Keep up the good work.

The usual set up but with a wonderful twist. You are among the very best authors on this site, and this story, as always, was outstanding!

It's hard to imagine reading about a true loving wife here in the loving wife section. There are too many "authors" (using that term very loosely) that seem to think that wives shouldn't have the ability to withstand another man's bullshit and find betrayal so very erotic. Thank you for showcasing a true loving couple. Just like in the story, it's great to see diamonds instead of the crap that normally stinks up this section.

Great story. Technically well written. Interesting, understandable, emotional. What man wouldn't love his wife after having heard what he heard. The very definition of a "loving wife."

HDK your stories keep getting better and better, and we got two in a row this week. A loving wife who is well grounded and very very bright...what a concept!

but the story turned out to be a focus on, a discussion about, love and family functionality: how a loving set of parents raise their kids and how that unit is the "troops" standing against bad elements; and how each parents, as leaders of the "troops" do their jobs accordingly in the safeguarding of the group <p>

with many other elements flying around: is she or is she not going to make a decision that can not be reversed and which would have tragic consequences?, etc. And, yes, as the girls say, there's a lot of loving sex by the parents, so one of the messages is: you can have lots of exciting sex and still have a good, strong family, with both partners defending the others against all who would want to hurt the "troops"...

Forty comments, and only one 75 keeps it from being a slam-dunk, all 100s. As well it should. Brother, you've written some great stories, but this might be your best. I kind of got a hint at where you were going to go when you had the mother-in-law so vocally defend Greg at the family gathering. Like mother, like daughter. I got worried for a second, when the colonel joined the wife in her office, but I knew when she started quizzing him about heroism that she wasn't going to succumb to his advances. Outstanding work. BTW, I'm sending you a private message you might be interested in.

Outstanding. I really loved how the 'Hero' who tries to seduce a married woman gets put in his place.

Neither husband nor wife is portrayed as a stereotype. They make wise choices based on a solid, open relationship. Man, it is always refreshing to find that in a Loving Wives story and it's amazing what talent can do to a simple little story. Thanks for sharing, I look forward to your next contribution.

First of all, it is refreshing to read a story where the wife stand up for the husband even when he's not around. Obviously she loves him very much.

The writing was well composed and very good. I have come to expect that of you though HDK, and I thank you for sharing your work with the rest of us.

You know I was afraid that Greg was prepared for Sarah to "fall" so to speak. It nice to read about a couple who appreciate what they have in each other.__________________

Thanks!___________________________________________________

SleeplessinMD

Tense stuff, great work.

Wow - a story of hope and joy. A story of reassurance and of "the little guy" winning. And dam....was that FIVE sets of tears....Thanks

....abolutely beautiful.

Maybe your best story yet.

Boyd

A Wife in "Loving Wives" that actually loves her Husband?!? *Gasp* You, Sirrah, are remarkable!

Write On!

served but his honor was never in it. Duty Honor Country. There were many years betwix the Point and the Parade, if the girl had been that improtant any leave could have taken him to her. Shew was but another notch to the cut into the stock on the way up, luckily for her she was more mature than he.

Great story! If everyone could have Sarah's kind of sight and insight! But let us not forget that the world isn't ideal. Men fail and so do women! It's not about greatness or heroism, but about the view you have for your loved ones. Sometimes they are good, and sometimes not so. Through thick and thin...through good and bad..through war and peace..STAY TOGETHER!

The story was well-written and very readable; My reason for not giving this story 100 had to do with some of the "little" things. For instance, some of the jokes were old, like the planets in the solar system are all OK to visit except "Uranus." I also wonder why a career military man, one who is successful in everything (except for dodging bullets) would not be married? Being married and stable is part of the route to becoming a senior officer. Of course, it's easier for Jason to be a womanizer if he's not married, and it's crucial for the story as well. I'm bothered a little by Sarah's remark to Jason that he could see more of her if he were to stay in town longer. We learn from subsequent conversation that she is not really interested in Jason, but why did she even suggest this to him (to stay longer in town)? Another argument she made to dissuade Jason had to do with the likelihood that her husband would be able to discern if there had been any infidelity. I'm curious as to why she did not state up front that she loved her husband and no longer felt anything for Jason? When she said it at the end of their encounter (that her memories of Jason were not very good), Jason just walked away stiffly. She could have ended it much more quickly if she had said this at the start (that she not only did not love him, she did not like him). I still think it was a nice story and a fresh way of looking at things, as HDK often demonstrates.

Finally, a story without a whore!

I think I would rather read some of the idiotic comments left by the LW Nazis than the kind of pseudo-intellectual "critique" left by Vulcan of Ohio. Geez what a self-important maroon.

Do you read Card or Herbert or Heinlein or (put your favorite author here) line by line looking for errors... or what you in your less than infinite wisdom consider to be errors?

These stories by HDK are there for your enjoyment. NO story writen for Literotica will stand up to the kind of scrutiny that you attempt. Are you writing a fucking book report for 7th grade English class - the collected mistakes of HDK??

Funny thing is, your criticism is way off of the mark. The problem, Vulcan, isn't HDK. The problem is you. You just don't get what HDK is trying to do. Since you don't get it, you assume HE must be wrong.

If it weren't almost midnight and if I weren't half punchy from working till all hours I wouldn't be bothering with a self-important midget like Vulcan.

Sorry.

"some of the jokes were old" ---- when two people are sitting around joking about ass fucking, eventually someone is going to use the URANUS reference. It is practically unavoidable. If HDK had NOT used the URANUS reference, then I would have said - hey that isn't realistic. I certainly would have used the URANUS reference.

And by the way, some of the jokes were pretty original; funny even. You are getting this for free and are complaining that HDK ocasionally uses a recycled joke? What planet are you from? I'd bet URANUS. (Yuk, Yuk, Yuk!)

"why she did not state up front that she loved her husband and no longer felt anything for Jason? "

Because if she had, the story would have lost a lot of its tension. And it would have been about a half a page shorter. You, sir, are an idiot.

'I also wonder why a career military man, one who is successful in everything (except for dodging bullets) would not be married?'

Because it fit the parameters of HDK's story. When you write your story you can make your career officers all married men. That would suit your sense of correctness I hope. (But it wouldn't make a great deal of difference in your story. But who cares about the story as long as the forms are obeyed?)

I'm not going to go back and read them all so forgive me if someones already made this point, But you really have posted two sides of a coin with this story and "Tomorrow Never Knows" that you posted yesterday.

The wife in "Tomorrow Never Knows" never gave a thought about what her cheating said about her. This wife knew that when someone hit on her they were saying they thought she might value a night in the sack with him more then the oath she made to her husband.

According to the over-all "logic" only AN INOPPORTUNITY prevented Jason and Sarah from POSSIBLY fucking: the Col. had to leave town quickly, lest his commanders change their minds about promotions. <p>

"Sorry, Jason, I won't go to your bedroom with you, because Greg would know when he looks at me in the face tonight... .but I tell you waht?... If you really want to talk to me more, after all these years, if you really think I am beautiful and that you truly still miss me, as the boss here at the hotel, I am willing to give you a few more days FOR FREE; all you have to do is say, "Yes, I like to stay an extra day or two, to get to know you better...", just give me the word and it is done and I'm sure we can work something out....." Sarah said.... <p>

Unfortunately/fortunately, much as he LIKES TO FUCK her --- and he says it EXPLICITLY, not being coy about it --- his promotions are more important <p>

Of course, we know, HAD HE stayed --- and rather than saying, idiotically, "Let's go to my room right now and let me make love to you one more time," if he had said something "sweet" (to stupid and horny women) like, "You know what, Sarah, I miss you so much; I should have chosen you over this darn military life; it's so lonely, you don't know how I have been thinking of you every night all these years; it sounds corny, but it is true: I miss you more than any one I've known, all these years....<p>

"I tell you what, Sarah.... Oh, wait...I think I just ate something wrong, some food poisoning or something *wink-wink* ... I think I will need to see a doctor, Sarah, could you call a doctor for me...?"<p>

........If Jason had stay AND said something like that, her indignation would never have arisen:<p>

"Bastard, you think only your career and promotions are important here? You want to *make love* to me, yet you're not even willing to stay an extra day or two, so we could get to know each other better; you simply want to fuck and get on an plane and fly to DC to receive your medals... You don't even care about me, my job, or my family.... Here, I'm willing to give you free accommodations so we might spend some hours together... possibly... but you just want to fuck! Guess what? Let me tell you why," blah, blah, blah, blah...<p>

I can't believe how some of the comments can't seem to understand that Sarah asked Jason to stay longer not because she wanted him to, But because she knew he wouldn't. Remember they had a history and she knew what his answer would be. She only asked so that she could point out to him how self centered he was when she told him what she really thought of him.

I would suggest that you may have missed some of the subtleties embedded in this story. The off-color jokes shared between the husband and wife should demonstrate the easy closeness of their relationship and how much fun they have when interacting with each other at an intimate level. As to the wife's suggestion that the Colonel stay for a few more days in the hotel if he wanted to see more of her you should remember a couple of things. 1) She may have seen it as a pure opportunity to milk his "hero" noteriety for her own benefit to gain greater exposure for the hotel chain and enhance her standing in her position. 2) If you've ever experienced the burning contempt of an ex-girlfriend you might believe that she was merely toying with him while biding her time to shoot him down at her most opportune moment.

The Colonel's continued baiting finally brought out her ire resulting in the perfect counter-attack she launched to put him in his place.

P.S. The fact that the Colonel isn't currently married doesn't mean that he isn't playing the "military marriage game"! After all, he has been married three times already and will likey to marry again if only to achieve his military goals.

And on a par five no less. Loving wives is definatly the hardest to par. HDK, you nailed this one right in the sweet spot. No sign of a slice. Thanx for the wonderful read. LYG

I liked it. I enjoy how you manage to weave family life into these stories. It hads the realism. I was struck by the contrast between this story and Elanor Rigby, which is still one of my favorites of yours. Both had the same feel, the same potential and yet so different.

Excellent as usual.

You did a smashing good job and you made Greg look like a real hero and sara was divine in her telling off Benson and putting him in his place with egg on his face that is one story im giving high marks on a score of a 1000 Harddaysknight you are a hero. and you didnt make greg into a cockold in front of his wife like some stories i have read you should get a big prize for that.

Pat Murray

Shouldn't this be non-erotic? It's a sweet little story, but come on. Guess I had my Hallmark moment for the day.

A really, truly loving wife.. A wonderful story of love and a loving family life to match.. Sure doesn't hurt ones feelings to overhear a wonderful speech like that, one of love and fidelity.. I wonder if, someday, while they sit in their rocking chairs with the afghans over their legs, he will tell her about hearing what she said to Jason??

HDK: <p>I enjoyed your story. It was a welcome change from the usual bill of fare that is posted here.</p> <p>To 'thebullet': Wow, I'm really impressed with your knowledge of science fiction giants. Hey, do you suppose if I drop a few such names as Pohl, Brown, Kornbluth, Assimov, Bradbury and Sturgeon that I could pass myself off as literarily adept as you do? And you call someone else a "pseudo intellectual"?</p? <p>Perhaps you didn't get the memo, but 'Vulcan' is, as is everyone else,entitled to his own opinion. But perhaps you read it as incorrectly as you did 'Vulcan's' critique, and thought it stated that your particular view is that which should be universally accepted.</p> <p>'Vulcan' didn't dissect 'HDK's' story line-by-line as you have claimed. He had issues with particular portions and expressed his concerns. But I can appreciate that you, as self-appointed room monitor, would have wanted to have been consulted first.</p> <p>Disagreeing with comments submitted by another reader is not only acceptable but can add to the overall enjoyment of the "feedback" process. It's much more enjoyable when the dissenting person exhibits some graciousness in posting his own viewpoint. I refer you to the comments posted after yours by 'Anonymous in Ohio.'</p> <p>Harkening to your own comments, fear not the 'LW Nazi's' having anything on you. The idiocy contained in your own remarks easily surpassed anything posted by them.

As others said, it's talent and you got it. But there are still big white spots on the story map. Don't stop filling them.....-----------Bavarian

Sometimes i wonder why I enjoy reading stories in this catagory when they most often result in the destruction of a happy home and family. Conversely, I don't enjoy reading stories about some sexy wife having a great time with her husband, or some wimpy guy getting off on seeing his wife being shared. But your story gave us some tension; will she or won't she. Her speech to the old boyfriend was perfect. The fact that her husband overheard it, which helped destroy years of low self esteem, made it even better. You had so many elements that made this enjoyable for me, including humor, the girls and the gift. Thanks for, once again, sharing a marvelous talent.

ok, so i lost a tear or two. it was from the onions. my wife is cooking something. cookies, i think.

anyway, that's simply endearing. thank you!

The perfect no-slut wife. Kind of like most women actually. I was so afraid of a wimp out repeat from Eleanor Rigby (one of the most deeply disturbing whorror/wimp stories ever written) that I almost didn't finish reading. Kept me on edge till the ending that we would all like to see. A little mundane, and lacked sex, but was very satisfying, without being to preachy.

I loved this story. I would like to write a loving wife story this uplifting. It's great to read about a woman who is not a lying, cheating slut.

Aren't there numbers higher than five? The best of the best. Only an idiot would suggest this should be a "non-erotic" story - this is the most erotic story on the site! What a refreshing portrayal of a real woman - not the usual selfish slut. Way to go, HDK!

I really liked it.<BR>

BUT, I want to take many commenters to task!

What is so strange about the way this woman handled the asshole's advances? <BR>

That is the way most women would do it.<BR>

<B>Just because the majority of women in Lit stories are sluts, that bears no realtionship to the reality of how most of us live our lives!</B>

It is so refreshing to see an ACTUAL loving wife in the loving wives category! I think I love Sarah. :)

i liked how the children are developed characters, not just names w/ age. great story.

Excellent as usual. Keep it up.

I wonder why conceited heroes ever risk their lives to save those of the worthless plebes, assuming the American military has ever actually defended American soil or citizens.

You are a great writer and this is a truly "loving wife" story. Thanks for the words and your time.

An excellent story! Finally a story that doesn't demean wives into cheating whores - but honorable women who can have a very sexually active marriage. I felt very good about how this ended.

I know this is a pollyanna story but I just loved it. The Colonel was a pompous ass and the wife was a real person as was her husband

A True "Loving Wife" story that is found so many times in real life, To those who don't think that it is erotic, you have no idea how erotic it can be to hold in your arms the woman who has been by your side for most of your life. 51 years in my case

True loving wife. Thank you

I loved this story, but realize that a faithful woman is non-existent. They are all lying cheating whores, but it's nice to pretend! Keep up the good work!

Extremely well written. As pointed out by no-reconciliation zed a scary story.... When I read it the first time I was sure that she was doing a great job of setting up Benson for his fall. Remember that the question about leaving no one behind came first.

Great work, as always.. It is a shame that we have not seen much lately

love the story! thank you!

Have been there and know the husband's feeling... Thank you

Woohoo! I can't tell you how long I've looked for a story like this about a strong marriage. Absolutely beautiful. Very smart, and very funny too. The back-and-forths between husband and wife are so in-sync, they make the couple something to be admired. If only more relationships were this strong.

A strong marriage and a strong woman; this is the best Loving Wives story I've read...no other comes close.

I love this story, because it is well written, concise and it really gets the point across. I am a big fan of a strong marriage and this story truly shows how wonderful love can be.

I just came across this story and enjoyed it very much. Well developed characters, a believable plot, and a good flow. I really liked the interplay between two people who love each other and the daughters not being embarrassed by the love their parents show but hopeful to attain the same type of partner.

Contrary to some comments I think Loving Wives is the perfect place to post this story. I've often said that LV should be about couples such as this and another genre should be set up for Cheating or Slut wives.

Well done once again Sir Knight and keep them coming. Thanks for your hard work.

I just had to say that, it is quite refreshing to see a story listed in the "Loving Wives" catagory without cheating being sn integral part of it. Keep it up with these 'feel good' stories.

And got just the story I needed to make my day a bit beter. For some reason when my day goes to shit, I read 'Loving Wives' to see that my life ain't so bad, even if the stories are "fiction". I pull this one up, think here we go again, and BAM....Life is good. Thanks, Mate. :)

Thank you.

Sometimes its good to have a bad memory. Without new stories we can go back to the classics. HDK thanks for your work!

I can tell you it takes a hell alot more courage to be a husband and father than it ever took on the battlefield. War is short term but life is full of obstacles that will take you unawares. But the rewards are far greater, the wife in your arms, the first glimpse of a newborn, and love of a family. Great story that spoke to many.

from you and DGHear give me hope in a dark life that maybe there really ARE such women out there; and maybe, perhaps, if i've been VERY good, someday i may be blessed to meet one such as Sarah.

sadly, life has taught me that military officers are almost universally EXACTLY like Benson - filled with contempt, loathing, and derision for anyone NOT in their profession - who seem to take great pleasure in ridiculing and cuckolding every man around them who doesn't measure up to THEIR opinion of "what a man should be". "It's hard for me to respect any man who doesn't do what *I* do..." is a very common attitude among career military officers.

and, of course, the world is full of spiteful women who hold their husbands in contempt for being such weak wimps in comparison to "alpha male" types and willingly and eagerly throw themselves into bed with such men to experience what it feels like to "be with a REAL man".

thank you. thank you. thank you. thank you. thank you.

myrrdin emrys

This story truly belongs in the Loving Wives category. Thank you for writing it.

One of the very best written by one of the very best!

I really loved the banter between the four family members, it made it seem so realistic.....thanks and keep writing

What a great wife. Is it any wonder that he went back and bought the diamond neckless that he could really afford after first only buying the diamond ear rings?

The majority opinion here seems to be that the wife is the catch in this marriage.

The husband, who happened to do all the things that the wife mentioned, is thought of as the lucky one.

It is the wife who is lucky that she bagged him and not ended up with Narcissus.