All Comments on 'I'll Be Home for Summer Vacation'

I have one more story planned for this series. It will follow Tabitha through the rest of summer and then home for Thanksgiving Weekend.

Should I go ahead and do it? Or should this installment be where I wrap things up?

As I drew nearer to the end of this sizzling sequel, I found myself longing for a Part 3, one that brings the lovely women in Tabitha's family more deeply into the story. So YES, count me in as a vote for any future installments!

I too would like a sequel to this. I feel kinda sorry for uncle Harry though... Missing out on all the fun. Maybe he could join Brenda and Allison, or all the girls in the family at some point? Kinda as a reward for being one of te few males in the family who ever stuck around through all of this. Like a living, breathing Willy Wollop lol

My original idea for Uncle Harry was that he would be the "everyman" in this situation. He is supposed to represent how a person '"in real life" would react if he discovered his family or his neighbor's family was into rampant incest, which is to say, probably flabbergasted and/or grossed out.

In other words, I wanted to have this whole orgasmic saga of sapphic incest, but drop in a dose of reality at the same time. Cake, eating it.

In retrospect, it was a bad idea. I like playing with "realty" and real-life implications and consequences, but when I was writing this installment all I ended up with was this poor guy who's caught in the middle of a scenario where his wife is fucking his daughter, her sister, and her niece. IMO, it didn't give me the edge I wanted; it just made things depressing.

I asked for advice on the forum about how to fix this blunder without retconning Uncle Harry out of the story. Some sage words gave me an epiphany, and I felt like I ushered out Uncle Harry the best way I could. His "therapy" session with Tabitha leads to Tabitha realizing feelings about her own sister, which will kick off the lesbian family love fest in installment # 3. Then I ended "Summer Vacation" with Uncle Harry deciding to take a trip to clear out the rest of his mind and reach enlightenment.

As for Uncle Harry joining in...probably not. At this point I think this is the last we'll see of him. When Thanksgiving rolls around he'll be off on his motorcycle adventure. It's no so much that I'm squeamish about him joining in; he's just become a problem character for me and I can work better if he's somewhere else for the final installment. Rest assured, though: Uncle Harry lives, and he'll come home happy.

MayorReynolds,

I read and enjoyed both episodes of this series and would look forward to a third part - if you ever decide to write it.

Your stories are certainly well written, the balance between realism and fantasy is right and your characters seem sufficiently realistic.

The only thing that really bugged me in this episode was the repetitive use of toys. I'm not completely turned off by toys - however, I felt you overdid it a little.

In the second half of this episode, the women nearly instantly go for toys whenever the action starts. This especially made the last scene seem unrealistic. It was the very first time between Tabitha and Kate - and they instantly grab the toys after foreplay...

Nonetheless, this was enjoyable and totally worth reading. I know it's been over a year - but here's still hoping you'll publish a third episode.

Hugs,

Koriander

I actually submitted the third episode, "I'll Be Home For Thanksgiving," for approval this past midnight! I finished the first draft early this year but the print copy sat in my desk for months afterward. I just recently pulled it out, dusted it off and completed it, and that was after I debated whether to throw it away and move on. So it's interesting—and encouraging—that you posted this comment less than 8 hours later!

I appreciate the nice feedback and constructive criticism. I agree this one's on the toy heavy side. I try to rest the synonym resource area of my brain by adding variety to the sex acts but sometimes I overdo it a bit. The next episode has lots of toys as well (including Kate's silver vibrator and a new RealisticCock thrown in) but hopefully there's an equal helping of fingers, tongues and themes to add balance.

Again, thank you for the feedback. Episode 3 is awaiting approval and I'm hoping it will be live in a few days. In the meantime I'll be sure to read over your series! Sapphic incest is best.

Seemed to start you was trying to bring tabby and the other girl together then you flip flopped it like they didn't mean nothing to each other back to meaning something at the end which was it and why did you allow the family sex to happen so easily and tabby be perfectly fine with so much so that she wanted her on sister it doesn't make since with the start of the story how you made out like she was in love with the other girl who she went home with