All Comments on 'I'm A Ticklish Girl Pt. 01'

where's the incest at ?

You do know this is the INCEST/TABOO category, right? Nothing taboo or incestuous here, this is just a bf/gf fuck tale, and a not very good one, I might add.

No stars, because giving you one or two stars will just have them deleted in the next sweep, and you don't deserve three stars, not for the poor writing exhibited here;

quote:' I felt his penis rubbing my between my butts'.

quote: 'He looked at my eyes, my smile, and down my tight waists'

Quote: ' Steve always told me how he loves every part of my tender body, my tight waists, full breasts and deep armpits' - Armpits? WTF?

Quote: 'That was just like my brother Jill used to do'

Question; just how many asses and waists do you have?

Question: If your brother is called Jill, can we assume you're going to tell us at some point about your sister, Brad?

These are just a couple of the many, many mistake in this story, leading me to believe English is not your main language, in which case, why didn't you just write it in your native language and post it in the foreign language section where your fellow speakers can read it? If English is your native tongue, then you've got some major problems.

Check your work, get someone else to edit it and read it aloud, and post it in the right f**king category next time!

utter she-ite

... Either that, or English isn't your first language. Waste of time

Wrong Catagory

The anonymous flame

Brings naught but shame

To those who hide

As they deride

Without giving a name.

I thought the story was sweet and tender.

Its in the right spot as taboo is fetish...

The POV made it impossible to read. I seriously couldn't finish it.

I like the events.

Don't think it was written well.

A bit unrealistic.

I don't care if grammar is bad or spelling is off becuase I suck at those too. But could you at least look over at the typos you make. Also "bf" this isn't text. This is a story.Content wise, love it.

Please get somebody to proof read before posting!

What might well have been a reasonable story, was ruined for me by elementary errors of spelling, grammar or syntax.