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This was nearly great –

you came up with an original story line, which happens on this site every year

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</span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:12.0pt'>for all their shyness

neither partner seems to be a virgin.<span style="mso-spacerun: yes"> 

</span>That point could have been developed – seems more likely the guy,

with his shyness, would have been, while the girl <I>might</I> have

lost her cherry in some drunken encounter (all cats being gray in the dark, who

cares if the girl has no tits if her legs are spread and you can’t see what isn’t

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</span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:12.0pt'>science geeks would

have thought about using a condom<o:p></o:p></span></p>

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I agree with the previous comments, the two of them seem to have been around the block a few times for such nerds. Leaving that aside, though, the writing needed a few more trips around the editor. Or vice versa, whatever.<p>Specific examples of mistakes / wrong words / howlers:<p>bearing you soul<br>that was noting compared<br>I spent the next 10 or minutes<br> Kagel <br>I had discovered nervona.<p>That last one had me rolling.<p>Get an editor, please. Think through your characterizations. Tighten your story logic. There was enough here to build on, but damn...

Despite the grammatical and spelling errors, I enjoyed the story. Please keep writing.

Besides the grammatical problems others have mentioned, this story would work better if the guy was actually smaller than average. Giving him almost seven inches takes away most of the impact for me.

Really enjoyed this story, from the pure happiness of it, the lighthearted feel, nothing humiliating or derogatory. Just two misfits who fall in love/lust. That to me is surprisingly lacking on this website unless the male has a 14 inch member.

That is however where my one little complaint is: the girl gets to overcome her true below average problem by finding someone who truly enjoys her body, thus giving her self esteem a much needed rise. This I enjoyed.

However, the insecurities of the boy were that he was afraid he had to small of a penis, and the revelation was that it was actually a little above average. Not unrealistic or anything, and certainly not inhumanely large, but compared to how her problems were solved, I would have wished for him to be a little below average at least.

In fact, I don't think the tag 'small penis' really counts in this story, except as a story point, since no actual small penis is revealed.

But other than the numerical value of the man's organ, the story was super sweet and sexy in a matter of fact manner, and can't help but enjoy reading it.

http://flatchestedgirls.tumblr.com/

I would have preffered if the guy actually had really small penis that affected his sex life, then the story would be about two people accepting eachothers short commings. I do hate that stories about small penises is always about cuckolding and humiliation and I was hoping for a small penis story that didn't fall into those categories.

This was amazing. Flat chests are the epitome of sexy and this is probably the first time in my life I've seen a protagonist that thinks the same thing. I'd kill for more of this, or more stories with similar protagonists.