by Curiousissy
Waaaaay too short. The average story has around 5000 words, including chapters. You can't create a believable character, much less two or three, have them force/seduced/rape/etc someone in a story this short. Scores reflect that. Do NOT let criticism deflect you, keep on writing. But, write more, writer longer, etc. Good luck.
Thanks for sharing. I had a similar experience. The guy was reaching over his head massaging my ass as his dick brushed my lips. I had no choice but to open my mouth. I later asked him how he knew. He just said "HE KNEW"