by Lenny
I would give your story 10/10. To be honest your stories were well written but they are just not my type. I read almost all your stories to try and find fault with your writing but I could not apart from the usual typos which everyone here make. It's really beautifully written but somehow it's not for me. You phrase your sentences well. Like this story, it's really a piece of art but I just don't feel my heart pounding reading it.
I read your stories because I find it odd you got an 'E' yet the score was only 4.38. But I am sure you have your set of fans for your kind of stories. Nevertheless good luck