All Comments on 'In the Attic'

This sounds like the beginning of a great story. Let's hear more. Do the Zombies break into the attic? Do the siblings escape?

He needs to make love to her for them to survive, hope he get's her pregnant and they hang onto life.

decent sex parts..... zombies ??? .... whats the point... the attic is the haven ?!?! ..... they broke into the house but not the attic ... hmmmm... ok... 9 days in the attic... did they bring the fridge with them or were they snacking on forgotten animal crackers ?

story was good to start out with and leading up can see more sex in the future and how and when they get out of the attic. keep it up will look forward to reading the continuations... good job so far

It was good but you missed a lot of points of basic story writing. You lack a good setting, proper character development and you need to make the sex actually be interesting to read.

That was really hot and interesting and you should continue. I've had ideas like this for stories before so its good to see i'm not the only one.

I sure hope you will it is the start of something great I belive.

I thought the story was great, but a bit brief. Perhaps more in the future?

love the story idea. agree a bit with one guy about how they are surviving the time without food and still have the energy for sex. The sex in an erotic short is important but it can't be the story. If it is, it's just tab A into slot B no mater how you describe it. Really like the dream aspect. keep it up

This was Really good. Engagging writing, sweet and dark and pretty. I appreciate the level of depth and am impressed by the command of language. It's not what I normally find on this site. It's way better.

Very well done, halfdawrf. Keep it up.

It was ok I liked the plot, but it could have been Soo much longer of a story leading up to sex and even after that, kinda ruined a potentially great zombie /incest story