by Faxmachine34
Typical young man with a gigantic cock. Quick read tho as my interest was lost in two sentences ... I think.
Get real.
I read this site from time to time
And I am sorry not everyone is 8 inches plus
For once right in true life
Yeah, you need to learn how to edit. How a story flows. It's clear this is your fantasy, and that is fine.
Still, learn about human anatomy. You're not gonna bust through someone's womb into their stomach, nor can you see your dick, no matter how large it supposedly is for you in this story.
Research kid. Do it.
As big as a can of hairspray? ..... Would that be the regular size or the economy size or maybe even the jumbo size? More information needed here before this story has any credibility ..... oh wait! It already doesn't have any of that.
He is ten inches soft, thirteen hard?
She has 34DD tits?
Asked how he gets it into a girl he says "Well it takes a lot of lube, but it usually goes in eventually."
He fucked a girl for three hours non-stop, and then fucked his sister so that he could see his cock moving under her skin above her belly button?
She came when the head of his cock had only been inside her for a second?
And then she had four hours of "brutal non-stop orgasms" until she passed out?
What a complete load of total garbage.
I know this is a site dedicated to erotic fiction, but there's no need to make it so obviously a fairy tale.
Go away and come back when you can write readable, plausible stories, not just your juvenile wish list. You give amateur erotica a bad name.
Oh, and by the way, you seem to have the same character named both Jillian and Veronica.
The story would have been better with 9" and a little more. Four hours of hard fucking. I little stretch. Should have made it longer.
First time i wrote a negative comment. Dude 13 inch?? 3 hours fucking? Make it more realistic i think.
This is unrealistic and poorly written. You know where to put that 13
Incher
Go sit in the corner and wank yourself off. So you can dream up another unbelievable story
Here's a hint, nobody wants to hear you pat yourself on the back for having a big dick,even if you really have a big dick.
This can only be a bad parody of porn! I am astounded that it is not mentioned at the beginning as a warning, like, Beware: You'll be astounded and cum from laughing so hard!
As I said this is truly awful. But hey on the plus side this story is so bad that if you write another story surely it can only get better.
This is not even a little bit believable.You are really in a dream world.5
If it was your idea to write the most unbelievable bunch of Crap,To get a rise out of people!
Well you Succeeded #BigTime!
If Not & you thought story was good idea Well then your just a Moron!!!!!!!
Worst Story I've ever read #Ever
Thus far, 33 people have added this to their favourites. Come on, own up. Who are you? More interestingly, tell me what it is about this story that you liked so much that promoted you to add it to your favourite list -- I'm intrigued to know.
I don't know if the story is good or if it sucks, As soon as you mentioned having a 13" cock, I quit. I have no use in a story like that.
honestly it sucks, really 13. be more realistc. i just stop reading
I rarely write negative comments but if a cock were pushed into a woman's womb, she would be in severe pain and would not be orgasming. That's just a fact.
I usually do not comment anonymously but I don't want to get into a silly feud with anyone over this. You need to come back to reality.
That was it for me, I knew it was fucked up from there so I stopped reading.
Total waste of time 5-7 inches is a nice story and way more be leave able this was a poor story by some one who is not comfortable will real life sizes I have never had any complaints and I am only 6 inches so try being more real on the storys
you changed her name to jillian when its veronica. the size was a to far fetched and too quick of pace. nothing to lead up to a hot encounter...good try but put some effort into it next time and make it believable
I person in the comments, said they liked it. Out of 28, well make that 29 now. 13" really? 34DD ok believable. 13" not. I gave you a 1 star, only because, they don't have a negative rating system also. So I will provide my own......... -3. -1 for 13", -1, for 3 hours straight, and he has only banged 6 girls, -1 for utter bullshit.
You're my kind of man. I'm just a little bigger than you. I'm 41" long, yes forty one inches. My cock is as thick as a salad bowl. The head is the size of a cantaloupe. I'm doing life without the possibility of parole for multiple "fuckacides". I'm awaiting another trial for forcing the judge's brain out of her eye sockets while fucking her. But not to worry. My dick has magical powers.
Pushing thru a cervix opening isn't that easy, i've tried it before.
Yeah I kinda agree that it's too far fetched but after all it is just a story . It's all suppose to be fantasy
There's over compensating, then there's this guy.
Fuck me, try a little harder next time dude XD
My guess is that his balls are grapefruit as well? Or pumellos?
Neither funny nor arrousing.
Just plain boring immature fantasy.
(You nearly lost me already in the first paragraph stating «girls literally get wet when I flex my biceps». Probably it was meant to be a joke, but it failed to create a smile ....)
Way too over exaggerated and unrealistic. Make it fantasy and say he's some relation of Adonis, and I might believe it.
please write more stories. i think its great that its straight to the point. sister's pov would be good
Liked it but didn't feel like I was reading story and more like I was being told a story by one of my friends. Liked that it was straight to the point but was just off.
You ruined within the first 5 lines, a 13" inch cock, get real ffs .....
theres imagination and thers stupidity, sadly yours is the latter !!
Gee little kid, I'm gonna start calling you pee wee. Next time I see you I'll show you a real dick...
I like your storybut it could be a little more descriptive. If you fucked her for over four hours you have given a better picture of just fucking in one position al that time is boring. Please write more and give us a little more detail.