by hotzara
Please write more explicit incest stories. Your expression are sweety than others.
The story itself is good but the telling (writing) needs improvement in written English. Let's read some more of your stories after you get some English writing help.
I'm sure it would be more enjoyable if we knew what was going on!
Wow!.. heeheehee.. LOL.. This is so bad, It should be rated -0000 Keep it up, they can't be all bad..dan
You have no idea the uproar you have caused ,I thought my computer had gone beserk,Ihave told my friends about this we cant stop laughing,what the fuck is going on?No doubt it is very erotic could we have some English subtitles.
I have a good mind to give you a punch up the Punjab for this hilarious submission.
How nice to see a submission from the Vulcans but please include one of the Enterprise's translators or maybe Commander Data can translate for us ?
How dare you last poster I was a Vulcan Captain [of the delta wing kind]I cannot stop laughing at this Major Bloodnock would have loved it,I am going to report the whole thing to Ghandi who is not really dead but was last seen touring the Sahara dessert on a high powered wurlitzer organ.
Hotzara,you are a lovely lady,this story of yours has given many a great deal of entertainment,I dare you to write another one like it.A RAF pilot.Love you naughty pakistanis and indians[only the ladies that is]very sexy ladies.I bet you are very lovely all women from Pakistan and India are
Uhura has a lovely arse,I have flown for many miles with my flying boot massaging it as she relaxed semi nude in the prone bombing position,my navigation officer was disgusted.I bet the lady who wrote this also has a lovely arse.VULCAN JIM
You will not be single for long ,we have plenty of room it does not matter whether you are muslim, hindu sikh or whatever we are a cosmopolitan land as you well know.In fact I speak with a lady in Islamabad almost everyday.
WHAT ABOUT 2 OF NINE,A REAL BALLBREAKER,SO NO DOUBT IS THIS STORY IF WE COULD UNDERSTAND IT.But the language of sex has no words?
I think this young lady is very clever,we know this is a sexy story but she holds back on us to make the pleasure even greater when she comes clean with an english version,and she will I spent 22 years as a government liason officer dealing with Pakistanis and Indians,I ended up marrying one.BLISS
I'm sure someone as gorgeous as the writer can write a really hot, kinky story.
As a matter of fact, she may have already. Although i would have to learn Pakistani to actually be sure.
All kidding aside, another piece of evidence that the editors of Literotica only do their jobs when it suits them.
This was not one of those times.
Who cares that this is difficult if not impossible to understand[well for me it is]A photo gallery of the lovely woman that wrote it would have been more suitable,perhaps it then could have been submitted under illustrated.
Hi Hotzara, You say you are not beautiful, just "a common Pakistani woman". I am sorry to disagree with you, I think you are stunning, judging by your photo. I would like two things, one: to read the conversations in your stories in English and two: to see many more photos of you. Do you have dark brown nipples? (Sorry to be so personal, but I am very curious)
Keep the stories (and the photos) cumming.
Lord Areola
Please write another story ,I think you understand english a lot more than you would have us believe,I have a lot of Pakistani and Indian friends ,and they are of the same opinion.I also think you are very lovely.Incidently one of my friends has translated this ,it is a very erotic story for those left wondering.
Iloved this story Hotzara,you have the right name,Iexchange E mails daily with a lady in Islamabad,the latest one from her incuded details of a marriage bureau,I am not ready for that just yet.I do hope you write another story ,this has been such fun.JIM[ANGLO SAXON]
Was'up with ur characters. No matter u r a girl, ill b honest, not like other perverts. More like pimp story. Takin revenge 4m parents. Bhabi is IN deliberatly,Wich desi woman shares her husband? & u r also confused. & u gotta work on ur vocabulary. Lame.
uh god . both of you are ideal sisters. you are sexy and gorgeous. what a luky brother of you
This is awesome & out of the world. First I tell you that I am regular visitor of Literotica since last 6 years BUT this is first time ever I write a comment to any author or story. This is sufficient to tell you how much I love this story. Plz keep it up.......
I read the story and liked it. Later on I read all the comments. Its a good story coming from Pakistan however it should have been put under Urdu / Hindi category. A lot of comments are uncharitable. For those who do not understand Urdu / Hindi I can tell you its a very good effort. If you will judge by the portions where only English language has been used, you will realize that the language is not bad. Keep it up Zara if the comments upset you put new stories in foreign language category.
Maybe it's a hot story; I'll have to take others' word for it. You may think you're writing in perfect English, but the rest of us are reading this in complete incomprehension.
The constant yubbadah-yubbadah drove me fucking crackers; if you're going to post in the English language section, fucking write in English, otherwise you just confuse the shit out of everyone. Sorry, no stars, I gave up and went back to trying to decipher the instruction manual for my Korean-made microwave, believe me, it's a piece of cake after hurting my eyes with this "story".
Main Nirmala hoon, 39, hindu, housewife. Husband 4 sal pahle expire ho gaye; mera ek beta (15) hai. Maine ek office mei naukari kar li. Hamara chhota sa do rooms ka ghar muslim mohalle ke paas hai. Mera beta, Rahul, inhi Muslim ladko ke sath awaragardi karta hai, na padhai, na kaam. Ek din garami kuch jyada thi to mai cooler chala ke so rahi thi, tabhi mujhe laga koi meri saree niche se utha raha hai.main dar gayi, tabhi bete ki awaz sunai di, wo dheemi awz mei bol raha tha " Mansoor Mamu pahle aap Maa ko chod lo, baad mei Irfan aur Zakir chodenge. Mai aapka lund Maa ki choot par laga deta hoon, Koi mere blouse aur bra utaar rahaa tha. Mai jaan gayi ye Mansoor miya ke haath the; tabhi bete ne unke bohot mote lund ka supara meri choot pe laga diya, unhone meri chuchiya zor se pakad kar dhakka diya aur lauda 4" meri choot ko dard se behal karte huye ghus gaya. Mere dard ki parwa na karte huye Mansoor Miya ne zordar dhakke marte huye chodna shuru kar diya; wo 40 minute tak chodne ke bad choot mein jhadh gaye. 5 min. choot mei lund ghusaye mere upar lete rahe, fir dhire dhire bahar nikal kar supara muh mei ghusa kar us par laje rabadi jese virya ko chatne ko bola. poore ghante bhar baad palang se utare. Das minute bad, pahle unke bade bete Irfan ne ek ghante choda fir chhote bete Zakir ne. Mai do ghante choot saf karne ko utar bhi nahi p.ai