All Comments on 'Inkwell Ch. 02'

i am truly enjoying the story. i'm very curious to find out just why Atropos doesn't like Estephan and what the final test entails. Keep up the great writing. *grins* Looking forward to the next chapter.

editor, spell check,editor

D*MN YOU now i'll have to tune into the next chapter of this story. Great Story!

Nice tale BUT too many orthographic errors. OR get someone to edit before posting. You will benefit from this.

I love it but you need to spell check

I have the feeling you're doing it on purpose.... Please just keep writhing I mean writing or is it writting

But OMG... the sheer volume and variety is daunting. It is actually pretty distracting from the story. There were a couple places I actually had a hard time trying to figure out what you actually meant and i'm not *really sure* I know.

I also can't tell if you are setting Estephan up to be an asshat or if you just screwed up on the couple really nasty comments from him.

It started out interesting but it is becoming harder to buy into. Too inconsistent in some ways... to pat and predictable in others.

I'll go for one more to see if you can pull it out.

I finally get it! Your English is that of a second language. To Help out:

There: Over there are five pussies;

Their: Their five pussies are over there

They're:There are five pussies over there.

After each subsequent chapter I will try to help you out with idiomatic English.