All Comments on 'Innocence Ch. 02'

I am starting to love this family! Please post more parts frequently! FIVE stars for an Awesome story!

Maybe next time you can make it a bit longer!

Can't wait for part 3, I'm weak for this story <3

who gets to play real dirty with his mom and sis. I'm just wondering who was the first boy after midnight who celebrated by putting his penis in his mother's vagina. He's a very lucky guy too.

I been on this site for quite a while now and this is the first time I’ve left feedback such a good story can’t wait part 3 thanks. I’m trying to write a story of my own at the moment but my get up and go has got up and gone so haven’t done anything for a few months but reading has given me so much to think about and motivation to get my ass into gear and finish my story Thanks again

does dad ever come home or is he forever out of the pic except for money?

Terrific story and well written. Can't wait for the next part

This is awesome!

I wish there were more stories out there like this

Can't wait for part 3

thanks for the story. However, you should change it into a 3rd person perspective from chapter 2 onwards. Hope to see more of your submission!

This was a fantasy of mine.thinking of my little sister and my mom ,love it can't wait for more

i really like how you built up the characters in this chapter.

good work and hope you carry on.

but you can't just rewrite the same things (except now in the shower) as if nothing had happened.

delete both and have a GOOD EDITOR help you rewrite them. you jump around too much and hint at things that never happen which is frustrating to the reader. this is a good FIRST DRAFT ONLY now it needs to be edited and polished so it can be PROPERLY POSTED. GOOD WRITERS keep their stories to one point of view only and don't jump around the way you do.

Thank You for you criticism but I will not be taking my stories down for you. Don't tell me I'm not a good writer. I personally think my writing style is very easy to read. And so do hundreds of other people who have sent me great feedback. Since you have posted your comment anonymously I can't respond to you directly. I have stated that I do this for fun...I am not a professional author, but I am definitely much better than some other writers on this website.

Please tell more hopefully more between the 3 of them

Please continue the story , your story was very hot..

Just like most authors on here the 2nd chapter crashed and burned. Gawd, why did you even bother?