by wishfulthinking
I loved it, I dunno what you were worried about! It's written beautifully, as usual, and Leonn is, as ever, sexy as fuck.
Of course, I probably would have appreciated a final sex scene when he takes her home 'cos it does feel like you just wanted to finish the tale and get it over and done with by the end, but hey-ho, just my opinion!
You are a fantastic writer, be proud!
And well done :D
Zera
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shocked the hell out of me...but in a good way.
Fantastic story, the only thing I wish you had included was a epilogue (of sorts) telling whether they had a boy or girl :)
Wonderful! Loved how you disposed of the villan. Once again you are an amzing story teller.
So glad to see the story finished. I'm, glad to see you writing again. Can't wait until you finish your other stories.
So glad you finished this one. ;) You are one of the best writers on here. And I don\\\'t say that lightly!
Once again you have entranced everyone with your impeccable writing abilities. This erotic story enveloped everything you could want--force, reluctance, lust, suspence, passion, romance, and the list goes on. Please continue with other stories. Thanks!
I love this story. Is there any chance at all of you finishing "Conquered" too? You write so well.
It was really a great story. Like someone else said is there any chance of you finishing conquered?
i hope you finish "Conquered" that one is amazing. I really like it. You should finish that before anything else ;)
I absolutely love your stories. Thank you so much!
OMG you got me reading all of the chapter now!
This was so arousing and amazing! I really loved your stories. I actually read most of them and find that it just keeps getting better and better! Continue the great work, to keep us reading !
This was probably one of the best stories I have ever read on here or any other erotic literature website! The character development was superb, especially Bella's! Most stories I read have flat, non-emotional characters that only want to have sex. You have created multi-demensional characters who want to have sex! Thank you so very much for deciding to bring your writing skill to this website!
I NEVER leave comments, but this...this is the best thing I've ever read on this site.
I never, EVER read multiple part stories. But this one was so good that I just couldn't stop! Amazing piece!
I read and agree with all the other comments. Not one under 100, that's saying something. Now I'm sure after all these compliments, you already know your story is amazing, so allow me to stroke your ego ;) The character development was perfect, I love how Bella grows throughout the whole story line, it was very believable. Leon is an absolutely perfect villain/hero, you can't help but fall in love with him. The way you write allows the reader to empathize with the character, which makes the story so much more real. As a long long time fanatic of romance novels, I hope you start publishing. I would buy any book of yours in a heartbeat!!! Good Luck
I've read the entire series, and while I do think that your story idea is great and your descriptions are quite sexy, you should devote a little more effort to proofreading. There are multiple instances where you use the wrong word, double up words, put words in the wrong order, use incorrect spelling or conjugation, etc. It can be a little distracting, especially when the mistakes obscure what you're trying to say. Again, I think the story itself is great and sexy and all that.
Good luck and keep writing.
So good i loved it what a crazy love story
you have got to give us another one please
I really enjoyed this, thanks for the cute love story and the dark moments!
i absolutely looooooooove this! you're fucking awesome! and not just regular awesome...fucking awesome!!!! lol great job!
thank you so much, it's the beauty we're all looking for. :) fight on!
I enjoyed the story alot! It was very well written with an interesting plot and great characters. I hope you write more.
Lovely! I only wish that Bella could have gotten HER wish, in the end... ;)
that was absolutely amazing! congratulations on a wonderfully well written story. :)
I loved it far more than you could know! Thank you so much for this! I love romance! :)
I was completely enamoured with this story... the characters are so real the plot so tantalizing... the writing flawless... truely an awesome story!
Very good story, took me quite a while to read, but I just loved it, the description is exquisite, I loved how she was a captive but they eventually fell in love- wonderful plot, wonderful love story. Thankyou for a pleasant evening reading this :)
One of the best series I have read. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
I want more of every series that I read by you! Please keep producing.
this was great! i couldnt stop reading the story! fantastic!
that was the best story i've ever read..bravo...you are amazing...
cant wait to read more of your work.
Sincerly,
SensualMinx
This story was fantastic....I loved it!!!! You are a very good writer, so please continue your stories!!!!!!!! :)
EXCELLENT!!! Couldn't stop reading it!!!!
Plz also complete your "Novice" series...
Plot was original. Twists beautifully unpredictable. Why, however, did it take 11chapters to learn how to spell realize? Agonize, antagonize, and tantalize also need "z's" not "s's". Then to be so "s"happy, you spell defense with a "c"? Please get a spell checker! Finally, an editor might be good. If I had to guess, I believe you meant precariously instead of "prevariously" and intimidate instead of "intimated" in chapter 9. Otherwise, you are a writer worthy of Connie Mason or Cheryl Holt!
this was such an excellent story! i came across it by pure accident and i am so glad i did. i especially loved chapt. 9 when Bella had Leonn bound for her pleasure. that was such an erotic chapter. excellent job wishfulthinking and i hope to read more from u.
omg! read from like 1am to 4am just to finish :D awesomely amazing story!
Loved this story!!! Looking forward to reading more of your work.
The spelling corrections you're making reference to, "tantalising, realising" etc. - Using a "z" is the American English spelling. Evidently the Author prefers to use the proper English spelling but this does not make her spelling incorrect.
does not use uniquely US spelling. Anonymous is heavily outnumbered.
Most awesome thing I ever read on here!!! This would be an awesome movie!!!
You are a very accomplished writer with a vivid imagination. Only a truly awesome writer can make the reader hate a character as much as I hated Bella's father. Keep up the great work!
Love the whole story, I don't care to enter the spelling debate. There may have been a few typos here and there, and the spellings of certain words added, I think, to the setting of the the stories time and place. Loved it. More please!
Excellent story, the plot & character development were great. I have been reading all of your stories, you are very good! The spelling errors were hardly noticeable, i was more worried at the fact i have been reading this all night and haven't had any sleep, i loved it so much :)
Gripping plot, great character development, and fantastic descriptions. My one complaint is that Bella and Leonn never seem to get to know each other, and that they seem to only want each other sexually, instead of being truly in love.
I have been up all night reading and I can honestly say I am truly sad the story is at an end. I was gripped from the beginning. There were a few errors here and there, saying she was in a blue dress and then a pale green one a few lines later but I quickly forgot and was caught up in the story. With a tad refinement this would make an amazing published work. One I would gladly pay for. Consider a sequel???
-Forever a greedy fan!
Awwwwwww come on I want to see the after math when they gt back to the castle lol great story
Love it. All of it. And would love to see what happens when they get to the castle.
I loved this story!! I hope you end up writing more sometime. I'd love to see what's next for this couple and watch them have kids and experience married life. Please!
How is she punished for running off? What happens to Marie? Come on, tell us PLEASE!!!
Beautifully written story. I thought Bella's horrible father would never die. The sick man kept coming back aaaaarrrrrrggggghhhhhh! But I loved that Bella has found her prince in shining gold and black. Plse continue the story to at least the birth of the baby and what happens to evil Marie????
I can't stop reading it once I started. Love this story A LOT! Thank you for writing such amazing story...the sex scenes and the little bdsm scenarios are not just exotic but heart warming at the same time. Your story does contain what a subbie needs...the ownership...being used.....trust+lust+love with the Master...and the after caring.....I just love it. I appreciate u to write such amazing story.
Thank you for this story. I wished I could've read it a long time ago. I loved it... It was great :D
Another wonderful Story. I now read 3 of your stories and liked all of them. You follow a pattern in all your stories (innocent Girl, cruel man who thinks that he can tames the Girl only to find out that she tamed him).
This Story had slightly more Drama then your other stories which i read (captured and conquerd) and a nice happy ending. I am happy that Marie finaly did the right Thing and killed the Monster of a father. 5 stars.
Started out just liking it a little, but somewhere along the way, I got really into this story! Sad to see it end, but loved every second of it! I liked the twist at the end with Marie
This is one of my favourite stories! Thank you so much, dear author, for sharing your fantasies with us. Eleven long chapters filled with sexual tension which never gets old, you are so talented!!!!! Never stop writing β€πππ