All Comments on 'Innocent Thai Abroad Ch. 01'

Keep going!

narrative. Try telling your story utilizing dialogue. Dialogue puts the reader in the story... too much narrative puts them to sleep.

In general I d agree too much narrative is not good, here I think it fits the context fine. I am so sick and tired of all those "dialogues" consisting of "yess fuck me" and variations thereof. The topic is also sinfully sexy, as they use intercourse for pure therapy purposes and dispense with unnecessary tenderness and feelings, with just a little amount of control added into the mix