All Comments on 'Integrating Without Limits Ch. 01'

you really need to get someone to proof your story. too many grammatical errors

Great start, I enjoyed reading your story & I hope you will post the next part soon. I would not worry too much about grammatical errors most people who read this site know that the majority of authors are not pros.

very bad i couldn't even finish the first few paragraphs get an editor and do a rewrite and never ever post a story without going through an editor first i can tell english is not your first language but i've seen better written stories by 10 year olds either write in your native language or get an editor

When I read this I just knew it was going to be pretty bad. "Anan was studying in his room, when he was poked in his arms by her younger sister, Molly." Just plain sloppy.

It's obvious English is not your first (or second) language. So as I see it you have three choices: 1- find a site where you can submit stories in your native language, 2- get an editor or 3 - just stop writing and submitting to this site.

It appeared the story could be a pretty good one but it is hard to read because of all of the errors. Find an active author you like who will agree to rewrite your stories in better English. That should also help you learn better English.

keep going man...

awesome title and a good story

try writing in English - get someone to proof read and check grammar, word usage - it's like reading one of the Chinese manuals literally translated into english