All Comments on 'Internship Affair by the Window'

Wow extreamly hot story! Loved the voyuer part!

Loved it.

...and I could really relate to the exhibitionist aspect.

That was hot! I would've loved to watch Kelly and Joanna too. Hell, I would've loved to join in!

Hey,...I like your SF stories best.

Also, they’re short &immediate sex.

That too is perfect.

Thanks for continually writing & sharing.

Bob

i loved this , as usual i am left hanging for more. please more. thank you.

I really enjoyed this story, as i have enjoyed many of your other stories. You have a real talent for this & I hope you continue writing.

Sara

Fantastically erotic story....came as hard as the two women in the story did!!!

What an excellent story and one that kept the reader involved, and more (!), all the way through. Please keep writing you really are a very gifted word smith.

perfection in writing is done here by you., wow and wow, erotic and seductive, a little more descriptive would be good, but I really enjoyed this, a lot. gawd I hope there's more.

very good plz go on writing like this

The intern getting a little dominating there was hot too. Keep writing please!

The seduction, when clothes started coming undone felt a bit rushed. It seemed very sudden, and there was almost no time for Joanna to think, 'Am I okay with this?' For a woman who had never thought of herself as a lesbian, it seemed odd for her to suddenly allow Kelly to play with and suck her nipples when they hadn't even kissed yet. Four glasses of champagne would have helped make this acceptable to her!

An error worth fixing - the word 'labia' is plural. One lip is labium, two lips are labia. Lawyers use plenty of Latin words, and your characters wouldn't make this mistake. So that's why I think it's sensible to take a moment to fix this.

' ... Joanna stuck her tongue out and licked the labia like a lollipop. She licked it hard, but affectionately.'

So - 'She licked them hard, but affectionately.'

Nice idea, but the writing - especially the vocabulary - is a bit off, in my opinion. 'Vaginal fluids' ain't a nice way of putting it, is it?

every muscle in her body contracted. yes that's the way it should be

And then the both went to the bedroom and spent the night together!

Beginning of a series, perhaps?

Aside for a few odd word choices I loved it. Very hot! I’d love to hear another story but from the voyeur couple across the way. Maybe they had both had secret voyeurism fantasies which came out when they saw these women? Anyway, keep going!