All Comments on 'Intruder'

The typos are so distracting. You're a fabulous story teller. You draw the reader in, leaving them wanting more. True skill. Just terrible use of your/you're, etc. If you don't know the difference, get a proof reader or content editor, peer reviewer. You're a fabulous story teller. Please keep honing your skill!! <3

Loved this story write more. It was too damn good.

Very nicely done and the ending with Baby Aaliyah made my heart melt !, its a beautiful story !

I really think you should continue this story becaus id like to know more about Amore and Sharrod!! 5 stars and a favorite from me. Good job.

5 stars!!!

I read the story again and still find no reluctance. I think this story is in the wrong category. It should be in the Erotic couplings or maybe Romance, hell or maybe Loving wives. She gave her consent at every stage. She doesn't love or respect her husband so why not leave him and be with the lover? That would be a good chapter two.

check out the second part of the category. its not just nonconsent its RELUCTANCE as well. this story has reluctance, so the category is just perfect.

....nice writing, despicable situation. Your quote in bio makes great caution sign.

No it wasn't. She gave her consent and enjoyed it. It was well written.

Thank you