All Comments on 'Ioana Musca Ch. 02'

Story has some promise, but it needs improvements. Descriptions seem to be non-existent, while the dialogue seems to be carrying the story. Plus, there are a number of grammatical and spelling errors within the story. Slow the story down and put in descriptions of the characters, their actions, and the world around them. Like I said, this story has promise, but it needs work.

Thanks, JEDI_KHAN, I had rushed through writing the chapter so badly I forgot to write the story. I've submitted Chapter 4 already, but I'm willing to rewrite chapter 2 if theres interest, please comment, let me know.

Why would she grab her phone charger and transfer her calls to her cell when she had thrown her cell into the ocean in the last chapter?