All Comments on 'Is Love All or Nothing? Ch. 01'

Jackie or Jessie, Make up your mind and why is this in romance and not non-erotic?

Did the rest of it get lost?

There will be more

Maybe a little longer.

Next chapter is on approval process right now and should be up soon. Yes, it is longer.

Not too shabby of a story. Will continue reading to see where this goes. If this is your first attempt to writing a story; overall not bad at all. I see potential here.

.....on to Ch. 02.

Definitely has good plot and character development. Keep writing. I'm looking forward to see where this goes.

You do better with the dialogue, but the rest is so filled with errors it's hard to read. The tense changes back and forth from past to present, there too many repetitions and poor punctuation.

Sounds like an intriguing storyline. I do have to agree that the inconsistency of tense is very very distracting. I never made it to the end because of that.

The story is just unreadable right now. All the mistakes jump out at you.

A bit on the short side. Interesting people and space to go in almost any direction.

A good first chapter.

For now, I see a lot of intrigue, there must be many things in the closet.

5 * for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.

"Why would you say that to me?" - Um, because you told him to and said that you could handle anything he said.

"he turns towards Jessie who has a worried look on her face" - Name error. Probably should have made names more different.

"Self-punishment?" - I thought this was going to be about Jessie hurting him.

I thought you said you corrected your errors?

That one both my editor and I missed. I changed that in the word document but forgot to upload the fix. Oops!

What a super opening chapter.

The characters are beautifully written and the dialogue neatly crafted.

I think this will be a long romantic journey with missteps and falters on the way but has the feeling of a HEA at the end.

5 stars