by gorson
Sometimes the pace seems a little stilted, but I find myself curious as to where you are taking it. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Really appreciate the feedback - comments and votes do motivate me to write, and it seems less than 1 in 100 readers do either. I agree on pacing. Part of that may be because I broke this chapter into two - for logistical reasons but maybe a mistake - the next part is already submitted, so should be out very soon.
One of the most erotic stories I have ever read. Your slavegirls are so well described and they react like true slaves to the curt commands. A sense of time and place could be useful, and the way the slavegirls were suddenly clothed in one scene broke the spell slightly, but these are minor gripes to an overall very well written series. Hope you expand it's scope and continue for many more chapters!
Thank you: "Superb erotica" and "One of the most erotic stories I have ever read" - I was thrilled to read those comments! And time and place are coming in a couple of chapters...