All Comments on 'It Came from the Laundry Room'

No real story to this it's like you've tried to write a novel in two pages. There is no build up or coherent storyline. You can't seem to decide if it's a slave story, a lesbian one, a tentacle story, a space one or something completely different

Couldn't even finish this one.

Sounds like you made it up as you can were writing it, hard to believe.

You might take a year or two in proper word usage.

A good outline for a better story, maybe.