All Comments on 'It Didn't Work Out Ch. 10'

damn this is a VERY good story hope for the last two chapters soon. great writing

He loved Bridget. He could not give her up without a fight. Not literally, but he had to show everybody, especially Sian, how much he loved his wife.

Don turned up when it was time to compete. I just hope that Bridget is worth the effort. Every scene with Don and Bridget seems cold and passionless. And im worried that the possibility of him getting violent has been alluded to twice.

"If Sian isn't happy, then what we have isn't good for her," Bridget thought to herself.

She also needs to ask other questions: If I am not happy, what Don and I have is not good for me. If Don is not happy, then what we have is not good for him. If the narrator is really letting us inside the heads of our characters, then she must acknowledge that Don disgusts her as some levels in that pleasing himself overrides pleasing her first.

There is this habit of mine when things turn dramatic… I tend to be less occupied by the sex scenes and more about the development of the plot.