All Comments on 'It Just Happened Ch. 08'

I think the comments on your profile are similar to the actions of a 6yr old - you're taking your toys and going home. If constructive or negative comments bother you, perhaps you should not allow comments on your submissions.

I enjoyed this chapter more than previous ones, though perhaps 'erotic couplings' is the wrong category for this release, as there was no coupling nor eroticism about it.

Let us focus on the story gang. I have enjoyed

so far even though the title did not attract and the setup

had me about ready to cry uncle! But the complexity of the

story and the characters has grown on me and I was dissapointed to read that we only have four more chapters

ahead of us. If you had put it in the novella and novel

category the comments would be a lot more positive because

the people reading it would expect the slow and careful

structuring. But then a lot fewer people would have read

the story. It is a tradeoff!

its going nowhere. and my dislike in Ben are getting stronger. he is such a loser. blaming his ex fiance and brother because he'd rather go to some dumb fuck farm instead of going home during summertime. he needs to grow up. wah, wah.

Ben is truly finding his true self. Your doing a great job bringing out the true character of who Ben is in every little action you reveal to us. Ive actually began to enjoy the suspense you have us in. I look forward to seeing how he handles all these women you have allowed into his life and how he gets out of debt. Maybe he will build the new subdivision with his brothers wife and his new harem of women. LOL Man this could go so many different ways. Might I suggest you give Ben two sets of gonads to handle what you have in store for him. Please make your next post at one minuet after 12:00 tonight. I cant wait. LOL

I have enjoyed reading this complex story and am anxious to see where it goes from here.

REGade ~ Please don't let a few inconsiderate posters chase you away from here. There are some of us that are enjoying your stories!

My comments below are not something that I would normally do but my ire is up and I have to get it off my chest!

My complaint is not for the author of this story but for the authors of some of the recent comments. Look if you don't like this story then DON'T READ IT! Don't criticize someone's work just because you don't like the plot. Constructive criticism is usually always appreciated but don't just trash someone's work because it isn't your cup of tea!

I am not even going to try to speculate where you are headed with all this. I am simply along for the ride and enjoying it tremendously.

It feels like you have several good plot threads but refuse to let go of any of them if even for the purpose of greater coherency...I can feel for you, how it might be hard to give up on a good idea, but selection has always to be made, or you risk getting stuck in the plot. Is Ben a bitter victim out to take revenge or is he on a selfish trip to use and abuse any woman on his way? At this point it seems like the story is loosing focus, and while it still may gather momentum later on, the middle part was not strong but rather protracted and defused.

I'm liking this guy more and more.

"I'm liking this guy more and more."

I am not sure I am liking him more, but less. he seemed to be a good guy who was dumped on. Now, he is playing 4 women. The sister, the bill collector, the prospective client, and the sister-in-law. But, he is also being played by the women.