All Comments on 'It Started with a Massage'

Great story! 5 stars!

but the end went a bit over the top for me...

Very well written and believable.

As a person who works internationally maybe I just have high standards, but I found the fake 'bad English' pretty butchered and offensive. Never heard a Chinese or Japanese person say 'more better' or 'you go with me now' in my life. And 'Alyssa' would be pronounced more like 'ah-ree-sah' by a Japanese FYI, not 'aleyessa' . For future reference, that's all.

I really enjoyed your story. As for the other comments regarding grammer, spelling, etc I wouldn't worry too much...Some people will complain about most anything. Look forward to reading more of your work :-)

For the idiot taking issue with the broken english, offensive? Really, your comments are offensive and ignorant. I'm sure you're a trained international linguist. And the blow hard calling it a load of crap, I'd estimate you'd be very aquainted with what crap looks like, I'm sure you see it in the mirror every day. Shut your ignorant pie hole. A great, sexy clever fun story that took a few chances and was fun to read. Period. jahoo

A really good storyline with a lot of feeling and buildup. A part two would be interesting, but my imagination already has that covered. Keep up the good work.

From a comment above: "Never heard a Chinese or Japanese person say 'more better' or 'you go with me now' in my life."

I have. It is generally with people just starting to learn American (as opposed to English). I have said things just as bad when I was learning Chinese (Mandarin), all it is, is that is the only way you learn, you try what you think sounds right and if you're lucky the other person will tell you politely what it should be. I have had 3.5 years of Spanish, and the equivalent of a College Degree in Mandarin (I was a Translator/Interpreter) so I know from actually doing that it is hard to learn another language well enough to have native speakers both understand you and not laugh at you.

I don't usually enjoy stories past 3 pages. But I must say I was consumed with this one.

Just simply awesome. Thank you.