All Comments on 'It's All In the Cards Ch. 02'

i'm so excited to see what happens coming next! i liked the result of the following morning and how they gave into those new feelings so willingly. super hot

Great flow! I agree with the previous comment, having them think about the previous night and making them want each other again is sexy. ;3 I can't wait to read the following chapters.

I was not expecting the day after events. Total turn on!

Again very well done, Looking forward to the next chapter

Crap. I just realized I uploaded the wrong version of this chapter! I'm going to re-upload. I am SO embarassed.

There something super-hot about none of the people being in control in this scenario. I hope that you don't get too wrapped up in the wedding-dress "mystery" if it doesn't go anywhere.

Also, think about adding a physical detail or two,about each of the characters to flesh them out a little. I can't picture Brenda vs Jennifer, although I remembered Jenn not wanted to get come in from the previous chapter.

You are now officially keeping us in suspense! I'm anxious to see what the other cards do!

Don't worry, anon. Chapter 3 is done and ready to be uploaded. It took me 2 weeks to get Literotica to upload the corrected version of chapter 2. I'll be submitting 3 this weekend after I do some final checks for spelling, grammar, and continuity.