All Comments on 'Izabella's Story'

Good idea,fairly decent build up, but the last two paragraphs are a complete letdown! "Then he took my maidenhead"? Yeesh! What a complete lack of imagination and detail! Put thisone in the "Try Again" column.

I agree with the other comment. 'Just took my maidenhead'... you should have tried to be a bit more imaginative with it all. But dont be discouraged. It was a great build up--perhaps try to edit it a bit, to put details in. Goodluck.