All Comments on 'Jackie and The Field House'

First, things were rushed. The development at the beginning was credible, but when the intimacy started it was... well, balls to the walls. Plus, the sentences tended to run on a bit.

Second, too many contradictory facts. Did Jackie have 5 kids or not? It's not explained.

Finally, use of "&" and misspellings ("threw" instead of "through") were distracting.

Good try, but let's tighten this puppy up a little.

always knew she was a tramp!