All Comments on 'Jackie Begins her Transition'

No no no.. we need.Jackie to settle down with her father and be his wife. And to present to her sister and accept her. And not to be cheating wife

Don't get me wrong the writing is good, but I'm not feeling the story.

What made the first story so special was it was a family drama. It made things feel so intimate and real. Here it's just a typical slut story with not much soul. I hope we get a chapter where Jackie gets some one on one time with her older sister. Maybe Martin can have a night out with his two girls in the future.

I love your stories but for this the family dynamic is where it's at.

Lol looks like this one didn't work too well. It's fair, I had originally been planning on keeping the first one a standalone piece but afterwards wanted to continue it so I didn't have a solid idea for this one. If it's worth it I might make an alternate version. Oh well, we all have a few stumbles.

I enjoyed this story about Jackie but it wasn't as good as the original. I also found the name Robin a little awkward for the neighbor. I look forward to seeing how Jackie finds out what her type is.

I know the story is more than five years old but I read it just now. I like the story but after reading the first part and reading a few sentence of the second I was missing something. Where did the cage suddenly come from? How and when did the transition start? After that first night I miss the talk and the thoughts about what am I doing and a talk with her father. It looks like it misses a part in between.

And then the rush with Robin. I don't know. I like it but it was to quickly.