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mrbadkitty357mrbadkitty357over 7 years agoAuthor
why?

constructive feedback, plz. what did you like or dislike?

WiserbyageWiserbyageover 7 years ago
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This story could be very good IF YOU WOULD PROOFREAD AND CORRECT YOUR MISTAKES. This story reads as if five people from five different dialects are talking. And, the spelling and grammatical errors are a distraction. You wanted constructive criticism, there it is. Writing, even though this is porno, requires more effort than you are giving it or are WILLING to give it.

WiserbyageWiserbyageover 7 years ago
Help

Read some of Silkstockinglover's efforts. She is my favorite author; sexy, erotic, and pleasant to read. Compare her stories to yours, take my comment to heart, and you too will have a following.

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Always looking for inspiration and explore new possibilities with people. It's important to keep an open mind as well as a willingness to try anything at least one or twice.