All Comments on 'Jake's Awakening'

Hope there is more to come. Please continue story.

Interesting start! Hope there's more to come. Having once been uber religious myself I feel their pain. I love how realistic that part of the story is. Looking forward to more.

Yes, please write more about Jake and Robert. You have set the tone for new adventures for them both; it certainly will be interesting. Thanks.

My boyfriend JUST told me he posted this. I wrote it drunk the other night. Thanks for your feedback! I read it sober, found TONS of mistakes, and embarrassingly accept the compliments! Wow, I can't believe it. Evok99 is cooking dinner and pouring wine to make up for it!

Evok99 - you might feel it's a little rough and not polished, but it's a delightfully fresh angle on an age old story. I look forward to seeing where you take us.

I found a couple, but they were minor. This is a delightful piece you wrote, so thank your bf for posting it.

Not a ton of mistakes, just one major one. The names Jake and Jack are not interchangeable.

Good story but could do with some rereading and editing to get tenses and grammar right as that kinda detracts from the story

Those boys love each other, and sad as it is, neither is "in love" with the girl. She deserves better than to be tied to a man that's just hiding who he really is, while denying himself any the man he loves with all his heart.

I don't know if you are cobbling two or more stories together but jeez, do you ever proof read your stuff..? YOU called Jake by the name of Jack and had other inconsistencies in your story :-(