All Comments on 'Jamie & I Ch. 02'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

Great enthusiasm and attention to the erotic. I was having trouble following the story line, however, as you slip from past to present tense and back. Please stay in one or the other, past preferably since you are describing an event in the past. You do cause one's vitals to moisen and for that I am greatful. Keep working.

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