by KinkySlut2515
Lazy brutal porn. To make it actual erotica the premise of bondage and forced orgasm is fine. But bring in some realistic foreplay tenderness aftercare... some lube play before the 8am ass fuck... some loosening of bondage and gentle care before sleep. It's too harsh.
I like the idea, but am distracted by the frequency with which you use the words ass, pussy, and cock. I found myself glossing over the rest of the story following the first scene because the repetetive language was all i could focus on. I'd love to read an edit or continuation!
Great start to a great first story. I'm sure the rest will be nice also. Please keep writing!
Thank you for sharing, new author, and please keep on writing! Five stars from me.