All Comments on 'Japan 1891'

This story is wonderfully written! You need to be careful of your perspective, though, as you referred to the main character as "he" at least once. More of the tale would be lovely to hear. Nice use of the Song of Solomon to show how we often try to avoid our natural desires, only to fan them further.

Your imagery is excellent, both visual and in his mind. Your writing is also first rate. I would love to read a follow-on, either continuing his viewpoint, or presenting hers.