All Comments on 'Japanese Family'

Too many errors to count. Please find an editor.

I liked the story, many typos....... just enough in the story to want to find out more.......

... to comment, the others already covered the errors problem!

Obviously you did zero proof-reading!

I enjoyed your story and look forward to your next chapter.

Hey man, great story. You need to finish it ! All you anonymous people ( get a life) if that is all you say is get an editor or to many typos. How come you are not teaching or preaching some where else besides on Lit. Let some one tell there story. I could see if the authors were selling there work but they are not. Give them a break you idiots.

But you have to get at least one more Chapter to let us know if Yuka recognized him or did he leave with a Dream Cum True.

its open for a 2nd chapter and we would love to read it

Thanks to all for the feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed my short story.

I'll start working on a follow up chapter.

I hate stories that stop just when they get interesting.