All Comments on 'Jenny's Journey Ch. 01'

It's frustrating to feel yourself warm up with a story only to have it end so abruptly. More, please. And soon.

Mesmerizing domly Dom and zombified fledgling sub. I hear James speaking in a bad Dracula voice, "I know what you need!'

I understand beginning as you intend to proceed, but he's being dickish, not masterful. Yank her plate away and prepare to toss her out. Threaten punishment...for what? When she returns she's immediately set to crawling and called a slut. *eyerolls*

He's obviously experienced and she knows nothing. He's taking advantage at this point. Is it consent if you don't know to what you are agreeing? You write well, I'm just not into the characters yet. I will try the next few chapters to see if the characters become more developed and the interactions less superficial.