All Comments on 'Jen's Release'

I liked this as a warmup. "Quim" is not a word that we see here very often, and it was perfect for this story.

Ya, this is a first chapter, a warm-up if you will. I was going to write more but I thought I would put this part out to see what people thought. Thanks for reading! Any thoughts on what you might like to see next with her?

I like what you have written. The sentence structure was varied and I liked that. The entire thing wasn't monotonous so that was a plus. However, your work could have been a little more steamy. You could have described Jen's feelings and actions while she was playing with the shower head cos you skipped that part. Also, I felt quite odd reading that she was saying all those things out loud to herself. But I guess some people do that so I am not horribly bothered by it. I think you should keep writing :D