by Seethru57
So where is Chapters 2, 3, 4, 5, etc.....this could be the best of the lot!
start out wonderfully. Verrrry sexy, with the tension of crossing lines, and realization of one's desires. I hope you will some day come back and write subsequent chapters. Having said that, please feel welcome to just write more. You have talent for these stories, and I would enjoy reading more from you.
Referring to the comment of the person before me: As a female, kissing and licking on someone's ass in a public place doesn't sound believable or plausible to me.
As a male I found your story to be believable and the flow was just right. The story could almost meet the criteria of a bdsm as the seduction was in the mind before the actual act. Hope that you continue writing and expanding the story.