All Comments on 'Jeurridam Ch. 01: The Arizona Paradise'

An interesting idea; it suffers from shallow character development and lack of plot continuity so it self destructs. Had the author given his reader a modicum of respect he might have proof-read the thing and fixed some of its glaring flaws and clumsy syntax, not to mention all the spelling errors, the grammatical errors and the often downright use of wrong words.

I'm not finished reading, but very good!

I'd recommend you all to check the stories in the future. Will be updating, refining and patching the stories.