All Comments on 'Jill and Max- Night with Fire'

It's waist not waste and who the hell is Jen cowering in the cab...

Ignore the other comment...Just keep up your writing!

Homonyms, mixing up names, etc but well thought out and written

This really is a Hot story!

But I do have to agree with the other comments, please proofread. Or have someone else do it for you. I miss my own mistakes too. It's easy to do.

But mixing things like here and hear will stop a reader dead in their tracks and disrupt the flow of the story. Keep an eye on sentence structure too please.

It's stuff like that, that got you 4 stars from me instead of 5.

That being said, I also agree with passion4wf, definitely keep writing. Practice makes perfect and all that.