All Comments on 'Jill's Deflowering'

Are you sure that you're over eighteen? This struck me as very juvenile. It wasn't very arousing, but it sure was funny. You didn't write much of a story. Instead you jumped right into the sex, and described it like a teenager would. With each description I found myself cracking up. I'll give you a 3 for effort.

Sometimes it's nice to have a story that doesn't beat around he bush. It could benefit from a bit more storyline perhaps. I liked the way you got in both of their minds a bit.

The dude wrote 'would have' instead of the abominable 'would of' so he is definitely over 18 and just for that he gets a bloody well earned five stars. Better writing than most of the grammatically challenged idiots on this site.

Omg the babysitter for your kids shows up in short dresses and he doesn't tell her to dress more appropriately around the kids, Yeah thats father of the year

Hmm oh to be young again and helping other innocent girls first steps to pleasurable experiences. Unfortunately, this only happens once for all of us!

Yeah, I'd like to bust a few more cherries, especially the ones not on the Pill. Knowing that I was the first inside of those I got to first always made me rock hard

Doesn't matter how you spin it. That's just rape. Ugly stupid trash. Not creative. Not hot. You need to get mental health help. Just a sick and twisted mind, or heart, or both...