All Comments on 'Join Me'

Either way, a bit of chest hair for his sexy chest would also keep her nipples/breasts warm on a cold night!

Was his name "Mr. Day" or "Mr. Hay?" Or was he out to have a HayDay?

And only one apostrophe in the wrong place.

So dramatic an improvement from those early days.

("but the way Mr. Hay’s kisses me")

I liked it. So naughty.

Lue

Jenny needs to sport a baby bump in a few months

Well done for rising to the challenge so eloquently.

A full sex scene in 750 words! Nicely done :)

This was really impressive. I'm humbled. JB Edwards (Five stars, of course)

Great short story! Missed your stories. 5 🌟

An underage girl being seduced on a school trip by a creepy teacher. That's just wrong.

It has the ring of truth.

There a new story, “Tales from Old Shanghai 01 - Never Ending Love” that will go live tomorrow in First Time and in the Valentines Day competition- and it’s not short like this one.

See! You can do hot, hot, hot, short, short, short, well, well, very well. Now go back to your norm -- I enjoy more than a two minute read!

Now, this is something I have time to read.

With only 750 words to use, I think there were some words/phrases that could have been cut in favor of other descriptions in other parts of the story (body cues best left to the imagination after someone speaks) but if I had come here to "Get There" I could do it to this.

Hmm. I hope the "Get There" phrase is a normal compliment and not a creepy compliment. I certainly wouldn't tell Anne Rice, "Thanks, I was able to jerk off to some of the scenes that you write," but this is Lit, so....

Anyway, later.

...This IS Lit, so.... I do :)

Because, well, Literotica and we all know the intent of a hot story. If I can generate enough of an image in 750 words to work a reader from arousal to a keyboard splattering culmination in those few words, I am seriously smiling! Thank you for the compliment :)

This was good story in that it presented an image with so few words.

Great, short and sweet!