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Thanks to everyone that voted. This is the first thing I have ever written for someone else. I was asked to write it in the 3rd person. The next installment is coming soon.

Any constructive feedback is greatly appreciated.

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You can't seem to keep Julie and Ashley's names straight. Even in the description of this story, you use Julie's name twice! Read it out loud if you're having trouble with editing.