All Comments on 'Julie Goes to College'

You have no clue what a dominatrix does or how to write.

this is super creepy

Not a good story.

Don't quit your day job.

this started out bad and did not get any better, as I always say there is no way anyone should be allowed to do that to another girl, it is not worth giving up your freedom of choice for it

And you're a horrible writer. This story was vapid and emotionless. It was the intellectual and literotic equivalent of eating celery: you burn more calories eating it than you gain consuming it. It was a complete waste of time for both the reader and the author.

So the idea has potential that's for sure! What I would recommend is fleshing out the characters more. That's just my thoughts. If you disagree than another option is to read some other writers who do what you like and think about ~how~ they did what you liked. But you have a great concept here. When it comes to domination though you need to push more into the mindset of the individual. How is this lady being dominated? Speaking from experience it takes more than just *insult* *insult* *slap* *slap* to get the sub of your dreams. You can do it though. Take it back and try again. Also: as much as others are hating on your work remember, it's STILL better than Twilight/50 Shades.

what the fuck even is this, there was barely any erotic moments within it, -1

When the cock's come out, it isn't a lesbian story.

Terrible writing

So unsexy

another retarded comment from the asshole of LIT. Here's your offset dear annony to your 1 vote

Vote 1* for 𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐅𝐀𝐓 𝐃𝐔𝐌𝐁 𝐓𝐑𝐀𝐍𝐍𝐘 𝐖𝐇𝐎𝐑𝐄™ (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka ANON!

it's just terrible

Terrible, just terrible