All Comments on 'Just a Girl'

What a deft, controlled use of language, for such a powerful buildup and result. The first couple of paragraphs didn't hook me; then I got caught up with the people, memories, emotions. Stylistically very well crafted and balanced.

I knew you could do it. This is terriffic! Good job- thanks!

Truly shows a talent for erotica, I look forward

to future submissions.

TheLady

I DO like your writing... has a strange intellectual drive. I wanted more from these two though. Anna's conceding, the quick slide into passion; I wish she had been a bit more hesitant, and maybe Odette would have had to be more persuasive.