by TarnishedPenny
It was what you foretold but it fell flat for me. The detailed BDSM “light” distracted me for feeling any romantic connection between the characters. Great EC tale, not so much romance. 3.4*
Definite 5 stars! I don't usually read almost-vanilla stories here on Lit, but I've like some of your others and am really glad I read this one. Here are some ways with words that I especially liked.
the blessing of shared skin
two of us enmeshed in a happy tangle of sheets
A small shuffle and a toss of my foot raised them to my hand.
and smiled with her.
I can't picture us going out for dinner like this. Should I order in?
Happy Valentines day!
Clever premise.
Good backmstory/setup.
But there really needed to be more extended teasing/edging of his cock and balls.
Four stars.
Great imagination and good references to Chinese concubines's practices.
I'd enjoy nicely spanking my woman
Beautifully written. Erotic. Very good descriptionof the emotions and responses of the participants
I can stop reading now. This is the most beautiful and wonderful story I’ve ever read here. All the grammar and spelling is perfect, it makes sense and is an absolute delight to read . Thank you. My faith in Lit is restored. I have been reading so much garbage this is a breath of fresh air.
Hot as all fuck. Hotter. One of the most sizzling I’ve read on this site. My tablet caught fire. This is the second story I’ve read in this contest, after MelissaBaby’s, and they’ve both been five star efforts. The bar has been set very high…
Brilliant work! A perfect blend of romantic and erotic. I immediately put this story on my Favorites list, for both future enjoyment and writing inspiration. Hope you win the contest!
I liked the realistic details when she was trying to figure out how to put on the unfamiliar corset without help, both about the garment and her irritation. The details about how she put the rope on him were also very interesting. I have no experience with shibari, but you described it so clearly that I could follow everything she did in my mind's eye.
And I love that the handcuff key never got used. The opposite of Chekhov's gun. Leaves us imagining that she might use it on real handcuffs next time, if he agreed to it. But it also shows she's kind to her vanilla lover, and using sound psychology - starting with something mildly kinky that she was pretty sure he'd enjoy, rather than surprising him with something that might have scared him.
I also love the egalitarian choice she made to use the ben-wa balls herself, so he wouldn't be the only one getting uncontrollably aroused in public. It shows her character very well, and her respect for her partner. This couple clearly has a long and happy future together, and I'd love to read the sequel where Todd plans an evening to celebrate their anniversary, or their next Valentine's Day.
There is one amusing typo, though, in the first sentence on page 3. I'm pretty sure she'd wrap her feet around his waist, not his wrist. Darn that autocorrect!
Absolutely blissfully tantalising.
The imagery - physical and emotional - is portrayed SO well.
Super writing!
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