by QuietJohn
Very good story and we written. I hope you continue the story?
You keep referring to the main character as the sibling of his mother and father, very distracting. A sibling is a brother or sister, the correct term is offspring or child.
I loved this story - it had everything ...
I don't usually read stories that are this long - but, you grabbed me right from the beginning - and I had to see how it went.
I hope there will be a part II.
You created something special - an in depth exploration of a young man's discovery of his sexuality. The story isn't perfect, there are a number of grammatical errors that could have been caught by an editor. I was also not convinced by the protagnist's easy acceptance of the husband becoming a participant in the sexual encounters between him and the mother. Still, you created a great atmosphere for the story, and you write quite well.
WOW.....what a great read. I hope there is more to come as there are so many more directions. Does he get to fuck Kate? Does Kate become involved with them all? Is she already involved? Does he get to be with his mother?
Again thank you for the great read......I wish I had the talent to tell a story like yourself.
Scott
That was an incredibly sexy read. I was very excited all the way through and loved the twist at the end. I hope there will be more in this series.
And of course, the "sibling" thing was an indication as well.
Thank you for a very hot story. Would love it to continue. The combination of mother and daughter is very exciting. You write well, sweet and sexy.
it's rare that you find a story this long that actually stays engaging. Yes, there were some minor spelling/grammar technical issues here and there, but they didn't distract from the fact that the characters were flawed and full enough to be completely engaging. I would be interested to find out what happens when Kate comes home to visit.
VERY ambitious story the author fumbled in the telling of a couple times. Yet I quite enjoyed it for exploring the shadows that most other scribes wouldn't dream of guiding their readers.
The title is very generic for such a exotic" cumming of age "tale . Thanks to the author for sharing & but a curse too for putting me behind schedule with the diversion of this saga.
if you want to be taken seriously.,and I think you do. Despite being our fellow humans, and we love people because we know hate is dishilibating, incest is nonsense for the likes of you. Better not to go there. Slightly disappointed with your ass-licking to Huedogg, too. When you think of the flame he holds to the Literotic foundations.
A big question here though [quote from page 2]:
"... thumb so that the foreskin moved up and down my circumcised cock..."
If he is circumcised, he doesn't have a foreskin! That's not what I consider a minor error. :-)
For anonymous who "stopped reading at 44DD", I can only wonder why. My mother was 44D.
And yes, there were a few errors which spell check could have caught as well as a couple that it would not, i.e., wrong word used bu spelled correctly.
All in all, though I thought it a good story well written. Otherwise I would not have wasted time to finish it.
I stopped reading for a bit after the "sibling" fiasco. I'm very glad I continued though.
Good story! Was kind of beginning to lose interest around page five or six, but then you brought Mr. A into the adventures. I really enjoyed the three of them together. Near the end, after both had filled Mrs. A, where Mark got hard again I was hoping Mark would slide it into Mrs. A one more time and give us a description of the slipperiness and wetness that both of them had created by being inside her previously. And afterwards maybe even have Mr. A helping Mark and possibly the Mrs. by licking them clean.
Glad you are writing again. Looking for the follow on, so many directions to go with this.
This was really one of the most erotic stories I have read. Thank-you, and I look forward to reading more from you.
I liked it because you took a departure from the norm, and injected some kinky sex into it - making it all for the better.
Now that I think about it, only damn queer girlyman could get into the end of this story.
i never got that far the sibling thing killed it for me and by reading the other comments im glad i skipped it
a bit long, it was listed as incest but it ended up not being incest, you could do a part 2 where Mrs A and Mark's Mum get together then Mrs A gets Mark to join them in bed, maybe Mark's Mum will be blindfold to start with.
Very enjoyable read - loved the depth of story, the detailed background of the main protagonists & some scorching sexual encounters. Agree with someone else regarding the easy acceptance of the husbands involvement & although not my thing, it was still interesting and fairly original for a story of this nature. The main thing that spoiled it for me though was the lack of a proper ending. Strange place to finish the story & was as though you decided you'd had enough at that point. Lots of future possibilities though if you wanted to resurrect it & still worth 5 stars. Look forward to reading your other stories.
This was amazing. The detail really pulls you in and makes you honestly feel for the characters! I found myself feeling sad as i got to the final page and even more sad on the last paragraph. I feel like i know Mark and 'Mom.'
Regardless of the subject you need to write more! Whether its a continuation or a whole new taboo story!
Others have already mentioned it, but an only child is not a sibling. You have a good story line, but you need an editor and a dictionary.
.........what about the rest of the story ? This is well done. Held my complete attention every step of the way,....in fact had to reschedule some day's events so I could get this done. But I really want to read the next "book!" :-)
It was a great storyline and yet there was no incest since he was with the girlfriends parents--he only saw his mother naked and thought of her--it didnt show no mother or daughter so how did this be an incest story for as many parts as it was
Was a great story until you brought queer George into it. Way to ruin it!
Queer George added nothing useful to this story in any way! Mrs. A should've just dumped him halfway, as merely a side-note. His being brought in spoiled a good story.
It got boring as it got longer.
Cloths? You mean clothes. Champain? Is that a type of champagne?
Ambitious but it didn't work.