All Comments on 'Kayt takes Phoebe in the Bathroom Pt. 02'

[I want you completely exposed for me.] That looks like dialogue, but it's not in quotes, so I don't know if that's a mistake or not.

Otherwise, it's a decent story, but could use some polish. I recommend not having two different people speaking in the same paragraph, for starters. Break up those paragraphs for an easier read.

There are little things that can make a story easier to follow. Less confusing. Less of a chore.