All Comments on 'Keeping Warm in the Walk-in Ch. 01'

I really liked it. The story, nice work, keep writing.

But, in your notes, before the story, you used a wrong word..

I think it’s ‘wanton’ pleasure that you are talking about.

Wonton pleasure is what you get after eating a ton of wontons.

I almost didn't read a good story because of that error, so be careful!

Interesting premise.

But sex is sooooooo automatic.

Needed some extended preliminaries/foreplay beforehand.

Needed some significant involvement with her breasts. Your nipples are so hard. Do you like them played with? Do you play with your own nipples? Show me. Do you play with your pussy? Show me.

And so on.

Three stars.