All Comments on 'Kelly Ch. 3'

Mumbles, you need some help. The story scans fairly well, but I think you could be more inspired about people caring for each other. You obviously like pussy better than cock - which is fine, don't get me wrong - but your CHARACTERS should enjoy their choices (bi, straight, whatever) more than you do. I wonder if you've ever had the experience of someone who really cared for you being in need (not sexually, emotionally), and then "being there for them". Or vice versa. I think you could put that in a story and experience it vicariously, and it would not only make a great story, it would make a difference in your life. Whatever you decide to do, hold in your mind that the past is truly past, and it has no power to control that we do not GIVE it. Give yourself a break by giving a character a break - maybe an act of God changing their way of thinking.

The author continues to tantalize the senses in this third episode! Excellent!