All Comments on 'Kelly's Downfall'

This is a good start to a great story!!

Same old story

Great story. Hope she gets impregnated.

"Sugar sits"????

So bad the author couldn't be bothered reading it themselves.

Can't wait for a chapter 2, please continue, and ignore the haters. It's not like a spelling mistake or two spoils the story.

Good story - the slut deserves it.

There were some good points, if you're into this sort of story. No subtlety or surprises, but that's okay because the action was hot and it hit the right notes. However, this piece desperately needs an editor. Typos, bad grammar, redundancies. It was difficult to read in places. Get someone to help you with your writing and you could have a future here.

Can't wait for more

Even for fiction that was just stupid beyond belief.

I already read this story on literotica years ago ! I believe you were so influenced by it, that it looks like a copy ...

More proofreading would be preferred, but I enjoyed the content enough that it didn't bother me. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Where is Part Two of this story? Surely you are going to continue Kelly's "adventures".

You stole someone else's story.

Great Story lets keep it coming